Faber wrote something on the following thread and asked for suggestions to make it closer to his intended meaning:

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Ignoring spelling mistakes at Faber's request, unless they come up amongst the gramatical corrections, some things that I can see (which may not be everything) or that seem incorrect to me (but might not be incorrect at all):

an féar a ghearr => an féar a ghearradh. Use the verbal noun not the verb. an féar a ghearr would be "the grass that cut"

sa trathnona => tráthnóna without sa, or um tráthnóna.

Tá súil agam go mbeidh sibh uilig go maith inniú. "I hope that you will all be well today."
Tá súil agam go bhfuil sibh uilig go maith inniú. "I hope that you are all be well today."

Mo sheol is "my sail", "my loom" or "my bed". Mo shaol is "my life". In this case you need to say "of my life" => mo shaoil.

feasú => feabhsú

má tá ceart go leor => má tá sé ceart go leor

úd i mBearla => i mBéarla iad

comh maith => chomh maith

fa choinne léann => fá choinne léinn - fá choinne (faoi choinne) takes the genitive.

Someone more advanced may be able to comment on other possible problems.

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My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

Other things I am not so sure about:

Giota Beag a Scríobh "To Write a Little Bit"
Ag Scríobh Giota Beag "Writing a Little Bit" (?)

Beidh lá lán againn i dTexas. This to me sounds like "we will spend an entire day in Texas."

Perhaps:

Beidh lá mór againn anseo i dTexas. "We will have a big day here in Texas." or
Beidh lá leath-lámhach againn anseo i dTexas. "We will have a very busy day here in Texas."

Await further input ...

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

No.1C: Ag Scríobh Giota Beag (No.1C=No.1 Corrected)

Beidh lá mór againn anseo i dTexas. Tá orm an féar a ghearradh, an bruscar a thogáil go dti an láithreán bruscair, agus tá orainn dul go bainis i dtuaisceart na Texas trathnona. Tá súil agam go bhfuil sibh uilig go maith inniú.

Sriobhann mé sonraí mo shaoil gach cúpla lá chun mo chuid Gaeilge a fheabhsú. Cuirfidh mé é anseo fa choinne foghlaimeóiri eile má tá sé ceart go leor le Breandan. Cuirfidh mé i mBearla iad chomh maith fa choinne léann.

Obvservations: 1) I am VERY grateful to Breandan for giving a go at correcting this. 2) I will for some time have to write what is in my mind and then carefully go back through it for grammar and spelling to minimize my errors. I am such a rank learner (just now speaking) that I write Irish sort of like I talk Irish, and perhaps if I am more diligent with the spelling I can better mo chuid Gaeilge written and spoken, and pick up nuances of speach...example. I pronounce "shaoil" and "sheol" the same (and they may or may not be, but I must give greater care to my spelling than I have for the reader to understand me). It is my hope that these diaries can be a learning tool for others who may experience the same struggles and victories, and fall into some "Faber Traps".5) For a while I will first just write down what comes right out of my mind on a Word Doc, and then I'll spend a good while looking up probably each word in the dictionary, correct it and then submit it.

New words for me: Láithreán bruscair - dumping ground
Léann - learning

I would say (like hair) - féar a bhearradh

But I suppose you can use both.

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It is recommended that you always wait for three to agree on a translation.
I speak Connemara Irish, and my input will often reflect that.
I will do an mp3 file on request for short translations.
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Now that you mention it, féar a bhearradh would make more sense.

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

I though it was an féar a bhaint as in the jig 'Baint an Fhéir'. Which doesn't make the others incorrect, of course.

Personally I'd use that for farmers that are harvesting grass to make hay etc.
Not cutting a front lawn. But I'm not sure really.

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It is recommended that you always wait for three to agree on a translation.
I speak Connemara Irish, and my input will often reflect that.
I will do an mp3 file on request for short translations.
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That's how I saw it too. Bain has that feel of "harvesting". Bhearr is like "trim".

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).

Well that makes sense. Lots of people use gearradh although this may be Béarlachas. Bearradh sounds just right, and Bríd would know, just that I was taught that bain(t) went with féar - although it does make sense that bain would really only be used for the likes of crops.

Just for the sake of discussion, lomaire faiche is the translation for lawnmower, so I wondered if an féar a lomadh might be an option, and lo and behold http://www.citizensadvice.ie gives:
Is féidir an chuid is mó den dramhaíl a tháirgtear sa ghairdín a mhúiríniú, cuir i gcás an fuílleach a bhíonn fágtha tar éis an féar a lomadh nó fál a bhearradh.

This could of course have been translated by someone like me armed with a dictionary!

Thanks, Scooby. More new vocab learned!

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Múinteoir Gaeilge - Irish Teacher
My "specialty" is Connemara Irish, particularly Cois Fhairrge dialect, but I can also speak Ulster and Munster Irish with native-level pronunciation.
Is fearr Gaeilge ḃriste ná Béarla cliste, cinnte, aċ i ḃfad níos fearr aríst í Gaeilge ḃinn ḃeo na nGaeltaċtaí.
Gaeilge Chonnacht (GC), go háraid Gaeilge Chois Fhairrge (GCF), Gaeilic Uladh (GU), Gaelainn na Mumhan (GM), agus Gaeilge an Chaighdeáin Oifigiúil (CO).