Maith thú, a Fhéabair. My goodness you've come a long way in a short time. You must take after your dad at being good at languages, after all.
Am I correct in assuming that you would like people to offer suggested corrections? If so, can I move this to the
Cúinne Foghlaimeoirí - Learners' Corner for you? (If not, we could move it to the
Scéala section.)
A warning though, from my experiences at Daltaí and IGTF, the correction process can sometimes feel like you are being attacked by a pack of piranhas.
On the other hand, it's a rough road to travel but you get to your destination a little faster.